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Sunday, May 29, 2011

Shelley Watters Critique Contest Submission

     First 250 words of Dream Girl for critique for the Shelley Watters Blog Contest

      Title:  Dream Girl
      Genre:  Paranormal Romance  YA
      Word Count:  75,425            

Ok, I'm currently grappling with POV in my revision.  I had started out with the intention of writing everything from the protagonist, Christine's, POV but I attended a workshop a couple weekends ago that prompted me to consider alternating POV.  The voice of Gabriel hit me like a ton of bricks while I was in the shower.  (isn't that where the best writing ideas come from?)  Anyway,  here is the originally scheduled Chapter 1. followed by the new Chapter 1.  What do you think?  I think I know what you're going to say, but still.  I need your help!

                                           

                                                                     Chapter 1.  Gabriel
I hear voices on the beach, too close for comfort.  Next comes the crunch of boots on wet sand.  I whip my head around, expecting to discover them right behind me but I don’t see anyone yet.  Sometimes, it takes awhile for visuals to kick in.  One thing is clear; they’re after me again.
“Gabriel,” a woman calls my name and I book it into the fringe of trees that sandwich the beach between the water.  A branch scratches the hell out of my cheek but I don’t have time to care until I’m tucked safe in the dense foliage of a well-placed bush.
Peering out from my shelter, I catch sight of them, right where I’d been standing seconds before.  Damn, they’re closer than they’d ever gotten before, two of them, a guy and a girl.  Most of the time, I don’t see them but when I do, they always wear black combat boots.  Nothing else about them is consistent, from clothing, to numbers, to gender but always the boots.  It must be a requirement of their group, whoever the hell they are.
They walk together, heads swiveling in every direction as they look for me.  I try not to look directly at them for fear that they’ll feel me watching them and come straight for me.   
“Gabriel, are you here?” calls the girl.
I don’t answer.  She looks short enough that I could take her if I have to, but she also has a spiky hair 

Anime chic vibe going on that I don’t want to mess with.  



       OR....the original much revised version of Chapter 1.

                        

     For most of my eighteen years, everything had been as normal as the Cheerios I’d eaten for breakfast.  I was still getting used to living in my apartment but confident that I’d be all settled by the time college started in September. Summer stretched out before me like a lazy cat.  Nothing about it, or my regular drive to work, indicated that the Gothic adventures I so loved to read were about to become more than fiction.
            Ten minutes late, as usual, I hustled into the public library, my workplace for the past three years.  Ditching my purse in my locker, I strode into the workroom, an open space populated by cubicles for the librarians and long tables for the support staff.  I held my breath as I scurried past the row of supervisor offices on my right.  The last thing I wanted was for one of them to glance at their clock and see that I wasn’t manning the circulation desk yet.
            Escaping detection in supervisor alley, I made it to the staff copy room, where our mailboxes resided.  Hoping to just duck in to retrieve my nametag, I discovered my boss, Laura Faust, talking to a guy who wore his brown tee shirt and rumpled jeans really well.  At least, he looked good from behind, which was all I could see of him.
            I tried to inconspicuously snake my arm around them to access my mailbox but Laura stopped me. 
            “Christine,” she said.  “I’d like you to meet Gabriel, our new page.”

Thursday, May 26, 2011

Picture book #2

Well, it seems that Pajama Girl is well received.  MeeGenius has listed it on the Bestsellers section of their website.  It is always good to see your book and 'bestseller' together.  I also heard an awesome tidbit from a co-worker who shared the book with her 9 yr. old daughter.  After reading the book together, the daughter went to her room to play with her dolls.  Her mother discovered that her daughter had made tissue costumes for each of her dolls.  When asked what she was doing, the daughter replied that she was playing with her superhero dolls. 
That's huge news for me!  That makes Pajama Girl a success in my eyes.  No further proof necessary.  (but further proof would be awesome).
So, while I'm very happy with how Pajama Girl is doing, I'm also thinking of picture book #2.  It has to happen, you know.  I'm currently making a list of subjects I'd like to tackle in a picture book and drafting a few outlines for some.  The creativity this time around is not as dramatic as it was for Pajama Girl.  I will blame this on the seemingly never ending rain and gloom that Michigan is throwing at us this 'spring'.  I will also blame this on never ending respiratory infections plaguing my children and, in due course, my husband and me.  But I'm getting there. 
I am also gearing up to have my first ever blog contest, right here at the Restless Writer, so stay tuned for that.  Also hoping to get another interview up here soon. 
So I'll end by posing a couple questions for you.
1.  What is a picture book you'd like to see but haven't been able find anywhere?
2.  Who would you like to see interviewed?  (from the writing profession)
3.  Do you think the Michigan rain will end before someone has to build an ark?

Thanks for reading!

Monday, May 9, 2011

Pajama Girl has arrived!


     Ladies and Gentlemen, I am proud to announce that you can now download my e-picturebook, PAJAMA GIRL!
     It is the all-too-real tale of a preschool girl who assumes a super hero identity, complete with super powers, at bedtime. 
     I can't help but smile every time I see the cover because Ingvard the Terrible, (who is the opposite of terrible when it comes to illustrating), did such a perfect job nailing this character.  The smirk, the stance, the footy pajamas, I love it!
     I don't know who she is, but the Meegenius narrator did a fantastic job reading the book as well.  Can I also admit the fact that hearing her sweet, cheerful voice say, "Illustrated by Ingvard the Terrible" makes me laugh too?   
So, yeah, you might say I'm extremely happy with how this whole venture turned out.  I hope you will be happy with the book as well.

Quick note about the book:
     As much I would like to, I cannot send anyone a copy of the book.  This is the truth of digital publishing.  I can't do a book signing unless you want me to sign your Ipad, Ipod, Iphone, or computer screen with a permanent marker.  (for the record, I would be happy to do that).

Enjoy!  
   

Tuesday, May 3, 2011

Pajama Girl is coming!

The big day is finally (almost) upon us.  Pajama Girl will be released by MeeGenius for general consumption on Sunday, May 8, aka Mother's Day! 

So, for those of you who may wonder how I achieved this, here is the story of Pajama Girl:

My daughter was probably around 2 years old when the idea hit me.  Toddlers don't like to go to bed.  Picture books don't often depict girls as super heroes.  What if a toddler girl became a super hero when it was time to go to bed?  I thought the idea had merit.  I wrote the little story as soon as I could and I was pretty happy with it.  A few months later, I attended a local SCBWI conference and had it critiqued by Daniel Lee, who was editor at Turtle magazine at that time.  He had a lot of great things to say about the story and very minor revisions.  He basically indicated that it could probably find a home in Turtle or Humpty Dumpty magazine.  At that time, I was a newbie to SCBWI and I also clung to the dream of seeing my book in print.  (not my story in a magazine)  So I sat on it for over a year.  Around that time, the SCBWI Bulletin newsletter came out and it profiled a company called MeeGenius, which publishes e-picture books.  I thought it was intriguing so I did some research.  E-publishing doesn't give me the same fuzzy feeling as traditional publishing.  I had visions of receiving my print copy of Pajama Girl in the mail, cracking the spine and sharing the book with my children.  I could do book signings for my friends, work the local library circuit.  It would be so glamorously wonderful.  An e-book, doesn't really afford you those opportunities.  Yes, I could curl up with an E-reader to share the book with my kids but I'm not completely sold on that idea even now.  How can you do a book signing when there's no product to sign?  You see my dilemma.  So, I made a decision.  I would send the story to Turtle to see if there was still interest.  If there wasn't, I was going to try MeeGenius.

Alas, I had waited too long.  Daniel Lee was no longer the editor and the new one passed with a form rejection.  So, my decision was made.  MeeGenius it was.  It was exciting to peruse the artist portfolios and select an illustrator for my own story.  To my mind, Sean Ingvard Ashby was head and shoulders above the others and I could see my Pajama Girl hiding in the faces of his other characters.  I contacted him to see if he'd be interested in the project.  He agreed that it sounded fun so I sent him the manuscript and he began illustrating.  Toward the end of the illustration process, Meegenius announced their first Author Contest.  Sean and I were excited because we could easily make the deadline, which we did.  And the rest, as they say, is history. 

Clearly, I'm very pleased with my decision although it's not what I always envisioned.  I took a chance, deciding that since E-books seemed to be on the rise (they definitely are now) that maybe I could get in on the ground floor and take the opportunity to try something new while many others were still leery.  It paid off.

Besides my Pajama Girl success, I am hoping to get similar good news for a YA ghost short story contest I entered last week.  If I am chosen as a winner in this contest, my story will be one of 13 to go into a collection of short stories, the proceeds of which will benefit 826 National.  Fingers crossed on that.  If it isn't chosen, I think I will publish it here on my blog.  It was fun to write, I hope it will be fun to read. 

I will be attending a local SCBWI conference next weekend where I will participate in an intensive workshop with Pete Hautman.  Upon hearing that Pete would be at the conference, I read his newest book, The Big Crunch, which I thoroughly enjoyed.  I'm excited to see what developments for my novel will be unlocked through this experience.

I'm also signed up for SCBWI Annual again this summer.  Several of the authors I've interviewed on this very blog will be attending which gives me a chance to meet some of these writers whose work I so admire!  I'm so excited!

So, to conclude this rather lengthy post, the year of awesome continues to live up to its moniker.  I'm happy, you should be happy, and I hope you'll check out my first book, Pajama Girl on Mother's Day!

Thursday, April 14, 2011

Tamson Weston Interview

     I admit, Tamson Weston was not a name I knew until I got the latest edition of the SCBWI Bulletin.  In the back, they list market news which announced that Ms. Weston had left her position as senior editor for Disney-Hyperion to start her own editorial consultancy called Tamson Weston Books.
Since Dream Girl revisions are dragging on and I have no greater wish than to get it properly revised and start submitting it, I anxiously looked up her website.  It looked fantastic.  In fact, it was so compelling that I thought to myself, "I wonder if she'd agree to let me interview her for my humble blog."  Having nothing to lose, I asked and she did agree.  I found her answers very valuable and she's been excellent to work with, as an interviewer.  I'd love to have her as an editor someday.  So, without further ado, I give you, Tamson Weston: 


  Restless Writer (RW): What first attracted you to youth publishing?

Tamson Weston (TW): I was a bookseller for many years and was given the children's section to oversee.  No one else wanted it because it was always so messy and I loved it. Spending all that time straightening books and reading them along the way made me want to participate in their creation.  When I went to Emerson to get my MFA in Creative Writing, I took some children's writing courses with Lisa Jahn-Clough and then interned at the Hornbook Magazine.  It all unfolded from there!

RW:  What made you decide to stop working at a publishing house and start your own editorial consultancy?

TW:  The further along in my career I got, and the more the publishing industry evolved, the less time I had to spend actually editing books. Editing is the whole reason I got into the business. I've always loved working with new authors and illustrators and I'm pleased to have been able to work with people like Adam Rex, Mac Barnett, Mark Newgarden, Megan Cash and others early on. I decided to leave because I felt that I could spend more time doing this if I didn't have the added responsibilities of profit and loss--creating profit and loss statements, estimate requests and so forth. And I was right. I spend much more time with manuscripts and authors now. I will always have non-editing work to do, too, but it has been greatly reduced in my current role.

RW:  What genres do you most enjoy reading?

TW:  I don't know that I have a particular genre that I enjoy most. I like good writing. I think, generally, I prefer picture books and middle grade the most because they tend to be more playful and less brooding than YA. That said, one of my favorite books is I CAPTURE THE CASTLE and another is THE ASTONISHING LIFE OF OCTAVIAN NOTHING.

RW:  What are some of the most common mistakes you see in manuscripts?


TW:  INFORMATION DUMP is a big one. This is when authors withhold information in a story to create suspense, and then feel the need to provide all the answers somewhere just before the end. Key information should be revealed gradually and organically, not all at once like the final scene in PSYCHO when the psychiatrist explains why Norman Bates went crazy. And it's not necessary to answer every question. Readers can often imagine perfectly satisfying answers on their own.  That's part of the joy of reading!

RW:  What would be the traits of an 'ideal client' or 'ideal manuscript'?

TW:  I don't know if I have an ideal for either, but I really enjoy working with people who are honestly interested in improving their writing and/or manuscript and not just looking at me as a means to a publishing deal. I can definitely be that, but  the best way to make sure that your manuscript is going to attract the interest of the right agent is to work hard on revising and keep an open mind about its possibilities.

RW:  What should writers look for when hiring an editor?

TW:  I think it's a good idea to hire someone who has had experience working in the industry and has maintained those connections, because market awareness is pretty important, obviously, if you are trying to get published. But a writer should also be sure that he or she has an affinity for the editor.  Part of this means that the editor has either worked on or is interested in the same kinds of books that inspire the author.  Another part of this connection is being sure that you "click" with a person and that she has a sense of what you are trying to accomplish with your manuscript. The best way to find out if the chemistry is there is to communicate with the editor.  Sometimes it takes a phone call, other times it's an extended email exchange. The writer should be sure to ask questions about what the editor's process is before hiring him or her.
  
RW:  Should a writer send you a pitch or a query to see if the manuscript is a good match before you take them on as a client? 
TW:  I don't think a pitch is necessary. Authors should save this for agents and publishers! I'm trying to help the beginning author get to that point.  Usually, if the author is genuinely trying to improve his or her manuscript, I can find a way to help.
RW:  Do you believe there are manuscripts that are beyond the help of an editor? 
TW:  No. The only pre-requisite for making a manuscript better is a desire on the part of the author to do so. This doesn't mean, however, that every manuscript will find a home at a major publishing house. That's a different question.
  
RW:  What are your top five favorite books?

TW:  Ugh! This is the hardest question for me to answer. Kids books or adult?   I Capture the Castle, all of the Frog & Toad books by Arnold Lobel, The Astonishing Life of Octavian Nothing by MT Anderson, The Philharmonic Gets Dressed by Karla Kuskin, Of Human Bondage by Somerset Maugham, The Black Prince by Iris Murdoch. And of course, there are all the books I've worked on, but I can't even include any of those for fear of leaving out something crucial.

RW:  How do you feel about e-publishing?  Is it opening the door for more authors or opening the door for mediocre writing?

TW:  Well, honestly, probably a bit of both, but I still think it's worth it for the former. Having witnessed how many cool manuscripts I could not publish because of the business requirements of a large house makes me excited for all of the innovative, bucking-the-trend fiction that we will see in electronic form.  Buzz was always a very valuable publicity tool and I think we'll see some very interesting stuff rise to the top.

RW:  We know paranormal romance is still hot in YA literature right now, do you see any signs that a new trend is coming soon?  If not, is there a trend you'd like to see?

TW:  Well, there's a little bit of an alien trend on the rise with I AM NUMBER 4. And then there are all the Angel books--FALLEN, MERCY, etc., but I don't really know if these are significantly different than the paranormal trend. I keep hearing that there's a Steampunk trend, but I've yet to see it materialize in the same way that paranormal has.The truth be told, paranormal is still being acquired rather aggressively--I still see a great deal of these kinds of books still in the reports from Publishers Lunch, etc. In all honesty, I wish that publishers would adhere less to these waves of popularity and take more risks, but these are the realities of a competitive market.

RW:  Do you attend writer's conferences or workshops?  Do you have any appearances coming up?

TW:  I do attend conferences, but I don't have any scheduled at the moment.  
Hey, Pancakes! 
RW:  Do you write as well?    

TW:  Yes. I've written  a picture book called HEY, PANCAKES! that was illustrated by Stephen Gammell. I'm working on some other things now. Stay tuned....  

RW:  What is the most frustrating thing about being an editor?

TW:  Not being able to read as quickly as I'd like to!

Wednesday, April 6, 2011

Fantastic opportunities abound

   Remember when I told you 2011 would be the year of awesome?  I wasn't kidding.   Cool things just keep happening.  You'll recall that my picture book, Pajama Girl, is the grand prize winner in the first MeeGenius book contest.  Still awaiting publication on that, but you'll be sure to hear about it when it's available.  I am currently signed up for the next SCBWI-MI spring conference.  Last year's spring conference is where I met Jay Asher.  This year, I will be attending an intensive workshop with Pete Hautman.  (YAY!)  SCBWI LA, look out!  I'm heading back to the west coast this summer to hobnob with the stars of children's publishing once again.  So why do I have this Leap Books badge in the corner?  Well, thanks to Children's Authors & Illustrators for Japan | An auction to aid victims of the 2011 Sendai earthquake and tsunami, I have scored myself a 50 page critique with Kat O'Shea, editor in chief of Leap Books!!!  Could I be more excited?  Doubtful.  Well, I could be more excited if she enjoys those 50 pages and asks to see more and then offers me a contract, but I'm happy to take one step at a time.  Especially as the revision continues.  
     Anyway, I thought you might want to check out the current list of titles at Leap Books, and imagine, if you will, a world in which Dream Girl appears on that list.  Even if it doesn't, check them out.  
     Coming up in the near future, an interview with Tamson Weston, editor of Tamson Weston Books.  
It's still an awesome year.  :)

Thursday, March 3, 2011

First Anniversary

Do you remember what's historic about March 26, 2010 10:42pm?  Odds are, you don't but I'm here to tell you.  March 26, 2010 is when I finished the first draft of my YA novel, Dream Girl.  That moment had been seven years coming.  Let me explain. 
A friend of mine had given me a nice suede covered journal as a gift years ago which I decided would make a great writing journal.  On January 30, 2003 I wrote down these notes from a bizarre dream I'd had:

A dream
A strange new male co-worker with dishwater blonde/brown hair and a squarish rugged face begins giving me stories on tape to listen to.  The stories are usually quite odd.

-sisters, young girls, who for some reason have to cut their feet off...in their pretty little shoes.
The man and I go to visit their home and encounter the ghost of the sisters and their cruel father.  A horribly creepy scene, but I'm not scared by it.

-go back in time to visit two brothers, young men in their 20s.  Long hair in pony tail-dark, red head with shoulder length hair.  We aren't afraid of each other.  We picked the day dark hair suddenly goes mad and dies.  Unfortunate.  He's very kind.  A guard comes in to inspect.  I fly to the top of a tall bookcase to hide.  The brother's body lays on its back on the floor, red head kneeling beside it.  I close my eyes.  Open them to find guard's blade inches from my face.  I pinch the blade and point it away.  Explain I'm not from there.  Disappears.  I wake.


Ok, so those are some crazy notes.  But the dream was so vivid and unusual that I felt I could use it for something, someday.  Flash forward to 2005.  I was doing book reviews for www.myshelf.com  I had requested a YA book called A Crack in the Line by Michael Lawrence because it sounded interesting.  I picked the book up as soon as it arrived and read it feverishly.  I loved it.  When I put it down, a lightbulb came on in my brain.  It basically said, "Oh my God.  That dream I had, I can write it as a novel but it needs to be a YA novel!  I did a little thinking as the basic outline and characters started to form in my head.  I first sat down to write it on August 31, 2005.  I got married September 9, 2005.  I got pregnant shortly thereafter.  Life came on with a vibrant vengeance and Dream Girl went mostly into hibernation again. 

After my son was born, June 2009, I decided that it was now or never for Dream Girl.  I wanted to be a writer.  I kept telling people I was writing a book but was I really?  I wanted it to be a reality.  I wanted something to show for all my years of thinking and wishing and wanting.  So I sat down to write as I could find time and I worked it out.  I averaged 2-4 chapters a week.  I gave myself the deadline of having the first draft complete by the time I went to LA for the SCBWI writer's conference in August.  And, dear reader, I accomplished that goal, ahead of schedule on March 26.  Whew!

But the story doesn't end there.  Following writerly advice, I let the draft sit for a few months.  I figured I earned the break and I could get started on revising after the conference.  And yes, that's what I've been doing, slowly, ever since.  If you've been following this blog for awhile, you know there have been ups and downs and that I've started and re-started the revisions.  I've had breakthroughs and setbacks.  Currently, I'm back to breakthroughs.  This week, the pieces in my head finally clicked together.  I hadn't been happy with my first draft ending and I knew I needed some major plot fixes and after months of pondering, I believe it's finally come together...again.  I am just as excited about this project as I was when I woke from that vivid crazy dream in 2003.  I can see potential.  I can see progress.  I can see myself growing and becoming what I've always wanted to be, a writer. 

There is still a lot of work ahead to complete the revision process.  I am still working through that as time allows.   I still need my trusted critiquers to look it over after that.  I'll need to consider and incorporate their suggested changes and then, maybe then, I'll be ready to tackle that all important query letter. 

But that's where we are, one year after I finally completed the first phase of this crazy project.  Happy Anniversary, Dream Girl.  I can say, with certainty, you only get better with age.